Writing Game Itty Bitty

[basric]

TITLE: New Love
AUTHOR:basric
RATING: G
WORD COUNT: 69
FEEDBACK: on || FEEDBACK TYPE:gentle
WARNING: none
SUMMARY:wondering of a man in love
PROMPTS:poem
A/N: Am not a poetess nor do I want to be
I am not a poet, not worth your time to hit "Here"

I know that I love you
You say you love me too
But this love is so fragile so new
But I ache to know for sure
I want to reach
And feel the strength of our love
And yet I am afraid
That what I touch
Will be shattered by my touch
And so I stay in Limbo
Finding little comfort
In knowing that I do not know.

Comments

[rejeneration.livejournal.com]

The last two lines really hit it out of the park for me-- Finding little comfort in knowing that I do not know. That is so brilliantly worded. It flows perfectly. It's written in a way that it flows perfectly. The timing is just... well, perfect. =P =D

Sorry, I know you said feedback off, but unfortunately, I couldn't let it go unsaid. Poet or not, this is worth it! (;

[basric.livejournal.com]

Very kind of you. You can turn it on, I just know I suck at poetry. Maybe extremely gentle crit. I'll go change it.

[ladyjudithanne.livejournal.com]

Beautiful...so beautiful..there is a tear in my eye...